2026-10-20 · check · 1 paper · 16/40 · 40% · not grade-converted
0 left blank · Timed handwritten, five-line plan on the page, about 30 minutes of writing (14:27-14:57), about 75 words in six one-sentence paragraphs. Photo sideways, some letters provisional. Her own count of events in the piece: 6 (tutor counted 4). Planned last line (clouds on the horizon) and planned sea salt not in the piece; named check not run as her own check.
| Q | Topic | Marks | Question | Answer given | Note |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| 5 | W1.5 | 16/40 | Describe a harbour early on a winter morning, before the boats go out. One place, one moment, and nothing happens. | Six sentences, one per paragraph: rays of morning light through thick mist lit up the harbour; boats were relieved and started to head to sea; call of seagulls heard for miles; waves start to get fierce and unstoppable; sailors could see a storm in the distance; a cold blast of wind hit the harbour like a punch. | AO5 9/24 L2 mid; AO6 7/16 L2. AO5: one place from line one, sound and touch with named source, effective simile; six events against 'nothing happens', mood calm to threat, planned items unused, paragraph per sentence. AO6: capitals and full stops 6/6, no splices, one missing verb, tense mix, spellings provisional. Lift: one paragraph where nothing changes. |
Ordered by marks lost. These are the candidates for reteaching.
| Topic | Name | Marks | Lost |
|---|---|---|---|
| W1.5 | Descriptive: one setting, one time, no plot | 16/40 | 24 |