First logged English Language session. Q5 descriptive writing: built a full five-line plan (empty fairground after closing; mood 'alone'; zoom-in structure; entrance/Ferris wheel/food stands/tent; last line the spotlight going out) and wrote paragraph one, six sentences, on the entrance. Untimed, typed, supported paragraph-at-a-time.
Ferris wheel paragraph from the existing fairground plan; AO6 focus stays sentence demarcation (capitals at sentence openings).
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| W3.1 | Not started → Developing | Completed all five plan lines with prompting between each; chose the walk order (entrance, wheel, stands, tent) and the closing image herself. Plan visible before writing began. | |
| W1.1 | Not started → Developing | Chose 'alone' over 'lonely' and held it across the whole paragraph; strongest line 'the silence where people's voices should be' conveys the mood by absence rather than statement. | |
| W1.2 | Not started → Developing | Non-sight senses chosen not listed: 'the bite of the cold night air' (touch, chosen verb) and, after one prompt to narrow a general category, a single owl call replacing 'sounds of the park stopping'. | |
| T1.2 | Not started → Not started | Six consecutive sentences written with correct full stops but no opening capitals; all six corrected on a single prompt when named as an AO6 issue. Also corrected peoples' to people's, self-corrected 'against'. |