Shape C — second timed handwritten Q5 on the record, lengthened to 30 min of writing (5 plan / 30 write / 5 check), on an unseen tutor-set 2026-format prompt; she chose the story opening ('somewhere you shouldn't be') and wrote ~200 words in second-person present, 29 of 30 minutes writing, pencil, photographed, logged as attempt 6: AO5 13/24 (L3 lower), AO6 8/16 (L2 top), 21/40 — same total as 8 Sep but composed differently. Zero comma splices (her own 5-minute check reported 0; verified 0), eight paragraphs each breaking on a shift, and the cyclical last line decided in the plan and delivered. Marks lost to spelling of everyday words (~12), two capitals after commas, one tense slip, and a setting/character carried by borrowed DC names rather than built detail. No retrieval starter (timed block). Her closing lines: timed practice; next is computer science.
Open with the queue's plan, unchanged: R2.1 Q2 on a real source under the 10-minute clock (8 marks) — June 2023 insert with the 2026-format sample paper — with her naming the method before it is offered. Then R3 Q3 structure. Still open from 9 Sep: the fairground diary branch and W1.2 taught properly (one named ride's sound — today's 'a whirring sound' is still sourceless). New AO6 focus after splices: a five-word personal spelling list from today's piece (friend, suddenly, happened, laughter, meanwhile) retrieved in starters, and no capital after a comma. Next timed outing due ~29 Sep: the description option this time, 30 min write, to check W1.5 (one setting, one time) and whether the clean-splice result repeats (second clean piece = T1.1 secure).
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| W3.1 | Developing → Secure | Second independent timed plan, 15 Sep: all five lines (mood, structure, four things, senses, last line) down inside the 5 minutes, unprompted, and the last line used verbatim as the piece's last line. First was 8 Sep (last line arrived late then). Loose-end bar named on 8 Sep now met. | |
| T5.1 | Developing → Secure | Timed, unseen prompt, 15 Sep: 8 paragraphs in ~200 words, every break on a shift (trapdoor/inside, corridor, the chair, the smell, waking). Second unaided demonstration on a different task in a different session (first 9 Sep, untimed own text). 8 Sep's one-block piece is the contrast. | |
| W4.3 | Developing → Secure | 15 Sep: cyclical last line ('all you can hear is the Joker's laugh') written on the plan inside 5 min and delivered as the final line, echoing the laughter of paragraph 1 — planned this time, not found. Second unaided instance (first 8 Sep, found in the writing). Loose end closed. | |
| T1.1 | Developing → Developing | 15 Sep timed piece: 0 comma splices in ~200 words; her own 5-minute check reported 0 and 0 were found on verification. First clean timed piece (8 Sep had 3-4). Not the second instance yet. | |
| T1.2 | Developing → Developing | 15 Sep: full stops and opening capitals secure throughout the timed piece; but a capital letter after a comma twice ('...along, You hear'; '...end, You see'). Splices gone, so the gate is now this habit. | |
| W4.2 | Developing → Developing | 15 Sep timed: shifts written AND broken at — the chemical-smell/whirring/fade-to-waking shift is a genuine change of scene and sits in its own paragraph. Loose end (shifts not broken at) closed under timing. | |
| W1.2 | Developing → Developing | 15 Sep: three non-sight senses used (scent of dust and blood, a strange chemical smell, a whirring sound) but the sound is still sourceless — no machine named. Same loose end as 9 Sep. | |
| W2.4 | Not started → Developing | First narrative-opening evidence, 15 Sep, untaught: second person and present tense held across ~200 words with one slip ('asked') and one 'had fallen'. Supported by nothing — an unaided first attempt that reaches L3 lower overall. | |
| W2.2 | Not started → Not started | 15 Sep: characters carried by borrowed names only (Jason Todd/Red Hood, the Joker, Nightwing); no detail an examiner could use to see them. The single biggest AO5 cost in the piece. | |
| W3.2 | Not started → Developing | 15 Sep: the task focus ('somewhere you shouldn't be') was directly addressed from the first sentence — a trapdoor into the Joker's bomb shelter — so no AO5 cap. 8 Sep's description also stayed on task. Recorded as developing pending a second logged instance against this ref. | |
| T5.2 | Not started → Not started | 15 Sep handwritten: noun-level slips recurred under timing — 'Jokes' for Joker's in the last line, 'know' for known — plus ~12 misspellings of everyday words (friend, suddenly, happened, laughter, meanwhile, corridor) and one tense slip. Answers the 11 Sep watch: yes, the slips recur in a handwritten timed piece, though the meaning survived. |