First unaided structure paragraph on the hyena extract with sentence frames withdrawn: it stayed on order and expectation (leap → circles → no attack → 'led to the anti-climax'), 0/3 frames, but opened with the quote rather than naming the moment. Ran: starter 5 items, no notes, one per message — chain steps not named cold for the 4th time ('why the writer used the word / what effect / how the reader feels': reader step present, 'what it suggests' missing); three tension moments: start (prejudice) and turn (leapt) named, 'skin disease' offered as the third, ending found after one binary prompt (attack? 'no'); foreshadowing defined cold ('hinting at something that is going to happen in the future') — unknown on 23 Sep; anti-climax half ('when a climax comes down', then 'not satisfied with the end'), sharpened to expectation not met; 'meant' spelled correctly. Structure paragraph (10 min timer, typed, checklist only) ~L2: quote 'ran around the zebra in a circle', shows nothing happens, 'it was supposed going to attack', names the anti-climax. Stopped at her timer before the added first sentence naming the moment. 0 blank of 6. Two closing lines not written.
FIRST: finish the hyena structure paragraph — write the one opening sentence that names the moment (the ending) and where it sits, before the quote; then say what that ending does to the reader (R3.1). Starter, no notes: name the three steps for explaining one word (5th ask); define anti-climax in one sentence; spell meant. Then, in a writing block, the fairground story: the mint / hide-or-stay branch with one character shown by one chosen detail (W2.2), one paragraph per exchange. Next timed outing ~6 Oct: description, 'new paragraph every time the camera moves' as plan line 6.
Hyena structure paragraph needs its opening sentence naming the moment (the ending) and its position before the quote, plus the reader effect; stopped at her 10-min timer. Two closing lines not written.
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| R3.1 | Not started → Developing | 25 Sep: first structure paragraph with frames withdrawn (0/3), typed, 10-min timer, checklist only. Checklist 2/3: quote given ('ran around the zebra in a circle'), why given (expected attack → nothing → anti-climax); moment not named in sentence 1 (opened with the quote). Stayed on order/expectation, 0 drift to word choice. ~L2 (target L3). Starter: 2/3 moments named cold, ending after one binary prompt; foreshadowing defined cold 1/1. | |
| R2.1 | Not started → Not started | 25 Sep starter, 4th ask, no notes: 'why the writer used the word / what effects the word has / how the word makes the reader feel' — reader step now present unprompted, middle step ('what the word suggests') still not named. Given again. | |
| T5.2 | Not started → Not started | 25 Sep starter: 'meant' spelled correctly 1/1 from memory (slip 'ment' on 23 Sep, aid mean+t given then). |