The learner's timed handwritten station description held as description for the first time and scored 20/40, but was declared finished at 11 of 35 minutes in one unparagraphed block of about 67 words. Ran against the Tuesday timed handwritten block, 13:03-14:06 (attempt 14). Structure word asked before the timer: 'cyclical', first reply. Plan on paper 13:06-13:12: five lines; the structure line holds a place again with 'cyclical' written above it; the 'four things' line holds two; the two extra lines she was asked to copy (new paragraph every time the camera moves; no events) are not on the plan in the photo, so the read-aloud of the paragraph line had nothing to read. Writing 13:12-13:47: 'finished' at 13:23; two one-paragraph instructions from the tutor produced 43 and 23 more words by 13:44 (about 133 in all). Check 13:44-13:49: two named targets in two messages, each answered with its own number (0 and 0, both verified); the unnamed third question was answered 'no' inside a minute, with two capital 'You' after a fronted clause, five past-tense verbs and six spelling slips unreported. First photo unreadable; retaken as two photos within 6 minutes. Marked the same sitting: ideas and shaping 12/24 (L2 upper), accuracy 8/16 (L2 top); previous three pieces 21/40. Three spellings given with aids (source, tracks, actually), not typed back. 0 blank. Her two closing lines were written. No status changes; W1.5 proposed developing for adjudication.
By block. NEXT READING BLOCK (Wed 7 Oct 15:30), carried unrun from 5 Oct: no-notes starter capped at 8 minutes by the clock - define anti-climax; say what 'attitude' means; type meant, different and attitude after each aid. Then explain three quotations from a fresh unseen passage, ten minutes, no step words in the instruction; do not ask for the step names. NEXT WRITING BLOCK: the fairground story, mint / hide-or-stay branch - teach 'one character shown by one chosen detail' first with a resource, then one paragraph per exchange; starter there: spell source, tracks, actually (aids given 6 Oct). NEXT TIMED HANDWRITTEN PIECE (about 20 Oct, when it is English Language's turn): a description; four things on the plan before the timer starts; the paragraph line given as its own message and typed back; when she says finished, one close-up paragraph at a time until the clock ends; third check target: the letter after each comma. Budget replies of up to 15 minutes.
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| W1.5 | Gap → Gap | 6 Oct timed handwritten description (railway station at night, unseen, attempt 14): one place and one time held across all ~133 words, 0 plot events (a lamp flickers and goes out; a mural is looked at). First of 4 timed pieces to hold (8 Sep and 22 Sep drifted into events). The 'no events' line was asked for but is not on her plan; it was in the task message. Unaided. Proposed developing, pending adjudication. | |
| T5.1 | Secure → Secure | 6 Oct timed handwritten: the version she called finished at 13:23 (~67 words, 3 shifts: onto the platform, across the tracks, the lamp) is ONE block, 0 breaks. Breaks appear only on the 2 paragraphs written after the tutor said 'write one new paragraph'. The plan line 'new paragraph every time the camera moves' was asked for and is not on her plan. Second timed wobble since secure (first 22 Sep); untimed it held on 23 Sep. | |
| T1.2 | Developing → Developing | 6 Oct timed handwritten, 14 sentences: 0 lowercase sentence openings (1 on 21 Sep, 1 on 22 Sep); her check reported 0, verified 0. Capital 'You' follows a fronted 'As you...' clause in 2 of 4 such sentences ('platform, You feel'; 'edge. You feel' - comma or full stop not readable in the photo, an error either way), and the last-written paragraph has no final full stop. | |
| T1.1 | Secure → Secure | 6 Oct timed handwritten, ~133 words: 0 comma splices, third clean timed piece running (15 Sep, 22 Sep). Her single-target check ('after how many commas does a whole new sentence start?') reported 0, verified 0. Nothing was present to catch. | |
| W4.3 | Secure → Secure | 6 Oct: named 'cyclical' as her structure before the timer, first reply, and wrote it above the plan. In the piece the opening image 'the colds hand wrap around you' returns as 'the cold tighten its grab on you' - an image that comes back changed, 1 of 1, unprompted in content (it sits in the second paragraph written after a tutor instruction to add a paragraph). Planned last line delivered word for word; 'rain again' echoes the puddles and 'Drip, drip, drip'. | |
| W3.1 | Secure → Secure | 6 Oct: five-line plan on paper between 13:06 and 13:12. Structure word given in chat before the timer ('cyclical') and written above the plan, but the structure line itself reads 'an empty train platform' - a place, third time (15 Sep, 22 Sep). 'Four things' line holds 2 (the smell of rain and dust; the temperature). The two extra lines asked for in the same message were not written, 0 of 2. Planned smell not used in the piece. | |
| W1.2 | Developing → Developing | 6 Oct timed unseen description: two non-sight senses, each with a source - touch ('the colds hand wrap around you', 'the cold tighten its grab') and sound ('Drip, drip, drip', its source looked for and found as 'a hole in the gutter'). Planned smell (rain and dust) not used. Third instance (18 Sep untimed, 22 Sep timed, 6 Oct timed), third different task. | |
| W3.2 | Developing → Developing | 6 Oct: task focus (a railway station late at night) addressed from the first sentence and held to the last line; no AO5 cap. Fourth on-task timed piece (8, 15, 22 Sep, 6 Oct), on a fresh unseen prompt after a 14-day gap. | |
| T5.2 | Gap → Gap | 6 Oct handwritten, ~133 words: 6 spelling slips (sors, trakes, murel x2, frount, Acualy; 'coverd' once and 'covered' once), 'colds' with no apostrophe, 'The light start', and 5 past-tense verbs in a present-tense piece (started, turned, were, was, looked) - the planned last line was already past tense on the plan. 22 Sep had 1 spelling slip in ~155. source, tracks and actually given with aids; not typed back. In chat: 'finneshed'. |