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| Attempt | Paper | Q | Marks | Note |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 8700/1 Q5 description — railway station at night (tutor-set 2026-format prompt, timed, handwritten) | 8700/1 | 5 | 20/40 | AO5 12/24 L2 upper: conscious vocabulary, some devices (cold personified, returns changed as 'tighten its grab'; 'Drip, drip, drip' refrain), some structural features; stayed description, no plot. Thin: ~133 words, 2 senses, first version one block. Lift to L3 lower: four things planned, a paragraph each. AO6 8/16 L2 top: 0 splices, 0 lowercase openings, short forms for effect; held by 6 spelling slips, 5 past-tense verbs, 'light start', capital 'You' after a fronted clause x2. |
| 8700/1 Q5 description — abandoned pool (tutor-set 2026-format prompt, timed, handwritten) | 8700/1 | 5 | 21/40 | AO5 12/24 L2 upper: senses chosen not listed, planned zoom executed, planned last line delivered; but no paragraph breaks at all, short, drifts into plot (spider). Lift: break at each shift = 12→15. AO6 9/16 L3 lower: 0 comma splices (2nd clean timed piece), commas after fronted clauses accurate, spelling far better (clorin only). Held by: lowercase 'all' after a full stop, 'a empty', 'caused'/'came' tense slips, four 'As you…' openings. |
| "The Wreck" — Q5 descriptive, 2026-format practice task (timed, handwritten) | 8700/1 Q5 (practice task) | 5 | 21/40 | AO5 13/24, L3 lower (clear; some structural features): sustained second-person present address, a genuine shift (beach into jungle) and a cyclical close, both unaided. Held down by one unbroken block with no paragraph breaks and plain vocabulary. AO6 8/16, L2 upper: demarcation present and mostly accurate (gain on 7 Sep); 3-4 comma splices; tense slips to past in a present-tense piece; range limited to comma/full stop. Lift: break at the shifts; clear the splices. |