Paper #10 (Wednesday timed sitting, W43), English Language section: 7/13 in 11 min against a 14 min guide, 0 blank, answered first. Q1 2/3: 01.1 chose 'dusty ribbon' for today's sky (missed 'today'). Q2 2/4: all three strands addressed unprompted; 'what' strand restated the shift instead of the event, 'where' line 8 right, 'why' gave a reader expectation but no link to the calm opening. Q3 3/6: three quotations all from the right lines with a valid suggestion each, none with a reader effect though the question asks for one on each. All 6 lost marks are technique, not knowledge: she had the ideas and did not finish the answer shape.
Reader-effect clause: on every language quotation, 'suggests … / makes the reader …' as one line. Rerun Q3-style (3 quotes, 2 marks each) with the effect half as the named check. 'What is happening' = the event, not the shift.
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| R1 | Developing → Developing | paper #10 Q1: 2/3, loss=technique — 01.1 picked the summer path image for today's sky; 01.2 and 01.3 right | |
| R1.1 | Not started → Not started | paper #10 Q1: 2/3, loss=technique — explicit detail 'Today the sky was the colour of dishwater' missed; two of three explicit retrievals right | |
| R5.2 | Not started → Not started | paper #10 Q1: 2/3, loss=technique — one of three multiple-choice parts missed on a line-range read | |
| R3 | Not started → Not started | paper #10 Q2: 2/4, loss=technique — three strands attempted unprompted; where right (line 8); what restated the shift with no event; why gave an expectation but no link to the opening | |
| R3.1 | Developing → Developing | paper #10 Q2: 2/4, loss=technique — identified the structural shift and its line but not the event at that moment | |
| R3.2 | Not started → Not started | paper #10 Q2: 2/4, loss=technique — effect of placing: 'big part of the story later', not tied to the calm 'not worried' opening | |
| R2 | Gap → Gap | paper #10 Q3: 3/6, loss=technique — 3 quotations from lines 8-16, 3 valid suggestions, 0 reader effects | |
| R2.1 | Developing → Developing | paper #10 Q3: 3/6, loss=technique — word choice read well ('swallowed' = eating the landscape, 'pour' = fast and thick) | |
| R2.2 | Gap → Gap | paper #10 Q3: 3/6, loss=technique — no effect on the reader written for any of the three quotations although asked for each | |
| R2.4 | Not started → Not started | paper #10 Q3: 3/6, loss=technique — three quotations chosen, all within the set lines, answer shape half complete |