Ran the 10:45 poetry block 10:46–11:24. Starter 3 set, 3 attempted, 2 unaided: Ozymandias inscription exact with comma and exclamation mark ("My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings. Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!") and "nothing beside remains" exact — second clean session running; "marks of weakness, marks of woe" not recalled ("despear", then "marks of sorow" after a hint), given and copied. London plan closed: 'why' line on one open question ("Blake wants us to feel like the people in charge are mean and greedy"). First-draft paragraph landed one angle and one quotation with no rewrite instruction: "near where the chartered Thames does flow" survived intact inside the paragraph (contraction spelled out, no quote marks) — synthesis test #1 run; faults were a garbled opening ("Wrote, never where"), a fragment, repetition and an evaluative "It seems like he has done a good job". One general steer ("tighten it") produced a three-sentence rewrite fixing all but the evaluative sentence and adding quotation marks. Evaluative sentence named; replacement went in a circle ("the reader picture the reader being controlled"), narrowed to "see the river as being controlled"; tutor contrasted with "as property". Exit ticket 2/2: first line exact with 'charter'd' spelled as Blake's (unaided); structural fact gave a theme restatement ("built around control") then "every five times" after narrowing. 9 items set, 9 attempted, 0 blank. Comparison paragraph not reached; spelling retype from session 28 still not done. Her close: "I made a paragraph about the poem London. And I don't know what we're doing next time."
Starter, no notes: "marks of weakness, marks of woe" (missed today), London first line, Ozymandias inscription with punctuation; fewer than 2 of 3 → re-copy before anything new. Then the both/A/B/so comparison paragraph pairing Ozymandias and London on control — model the shape once orally, then she writes it as a first draft, one quotation per poem stated as a hard count, each written on its own line first. Name the evaluative-sentence fault by count if it recurs. K6.1: retype London / Palace / priests / charter'd before the break (carried from session 28, still not done). Exit ticket: one both/A/B/so sentence from memory. Still blocked on all four set texts — no copies.
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| P1.02 | Not started → Developing | First written paragraph on London, supported (plan built with tutor, one general steer): one angle, one quotation intact, Blake as subject, 'why' present. Level 3 descriptor matched: 'explained, structured comments; references used to support a range of relevant comments; identification of writer's methods with some reference to purpose'. Exit ticket 2/2 (first line unaided; structural fact after one narrowing). Starter quotation 0/1. | |
| K1 | Developing → Developing | First draft landed one angle and one quotation without a rewrite instruction; loose end (one angle first time) met on this instance. Draft still needed a general steer for a fragment, garbled opening and repetition; evaluative sentence named separately. Rewrite Level 3, not Level 4 unaided. | |
| K4.2 | Gap → Developing | Starter: both Ozymandias quotations exact, inscription now with comma and exclamation mark; second clean session running (15 and 17 Sep). In-paragraph London quotation intact in words (contraction spelled out). 'Marks of weakness, marks of woe' 0/1 after a hint. Ozymandias meets the 80% starter bar; London does not yet. | |
| P1.01 | Developing → Developing | Starter 2/2 unaided with punctuation this time. No new Ozymandias paragraph; comparison not reached, so still no second unaided Level 4 instance. | |
| K3.2 | Developing → Developing | Exit ticket open structural question produced a theme restatement ('The poem was built around control'); narrowed once to the repeated word: 'every five times' correct. Fourth supported instance, none unaided. | |
| K5 | Developing → Developing | Writer as subject held in the draft ('Blake wrote', 'Blake wants us to feel', 2/2). One evaluative sentence ('It seems like he's done a good job'), second instance (first 8 Sep). Named by the tutor; replaced with an effect-on-reader sentence after one narrowing. | |
| K6.1 | Gap → Gap | Typed spellings: 'despear', 'sorow', 'chartered' for charter'd in the paragraph; 'charter'd' then correct in the exit ticket first line. Retype of London / Palace / priests from 14 Sep still not done; test #27 not run. |